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I would also like to direct your attention to the ultimate word of the second line in the fourth stanza. Let's check those dictionaries. There is nothing quite as thrilling as being able to confound the majority of your readership (all 5 of you) with a dull, 5-letter word which sounds like you should have learned it in 5th grade*. How did I do it? Well of course I cheated. Is it onomatopoetic? Nope, it's British.
*in actuality there may be many things more exciting than this, including but not limited to: free climbing, sky diving, snorkeling, dueling with sabers, mud-wrestling, and eating lunch. What is unique in this instance is not simply the excitement derived from such an activity but also the accompanying feeling of superiority.
+any other inspirations? Try going to an American bar.